‘I can never go back,’ like a child I feared.
What now? It’s too early to call for ‘help’. Scared of ‘Where is my rent’ confrontation, I traveled the city alone. I refused to sneak back in. Not yet! His work uniform, I suspect, is hanging in the closet.
‘Losing his marbles,’ echo of my laughter filled the empty streets. ‘Crazy landlord!’
If it wasn’t for my entertaining thoughts, I might have fallen asleep. A homeless guy and me on Grafton Street. The road led me to a quite neighborhood. I dared not enter before. Half the windows broken. The other half, covered up with wooden panels, hid what used to be a peaceful home. I felt like him.
‘Oh, girl,’ I shook my head. ‘You are asking for trouble!’
Indeed I was! Something to break the silence. Let the building go on fire. Let men shoot, I want to be a witness! No angel could stop my horrid thoughts. I ran towards the sound…
‘I want a building down!’
Dust in my eyes, I can’t see. I tear-up. Praising the noise for once, I sat quietly on cold concrete. Dared not to interrupt… I no longer felt like an intruder.
February 17th, 2013 at 19:35
Amazing composition.
February 17th, 2013 at 19:51
Photo or the writing. I am rooting for both
February 17th, 2013 at 19:39
A good little thought provoking story… Liked it.
February 17th, 2013 at 20:00
Oh that’s good, Orpheus! As long as it gets a reader to feel something… I am happy
Thanks for a visit.
February 18th, 2013 at 19:59
I know what you mean. I just feel it would be nice if when people come to your site to read a story, that if they like it they give something in return and we do likewise, so we all end up with serious readers, not those who read and are gone again.
Maybe I am not explaining myself very well, it was just a thought to promote the site, and help others who visit it. In the end we all want to know if what we put up, is good or not!
February 17th, 2013 at 19:50
I always love reading your posts! I never understand what’s going on but am always happy I read it.
February 17th, 2013 at 19:56
That, I guess, is a shame on me!
Don’t hesitate to ask! But I am happy you enjoy it,Green!
February 17th, 2013 at 20:10
Oh no! You’re fine! I just find it amazing how deep it is! You have layers to everything, which is so cool. (also I’m kind of dense)
February 17th, 2013 at 20:30
Pfue! I can chill now and write some more
Keep in touch!
February 17th, 2013 at 21:07
I didn’t know where it was going at first, but the end summed it all up perfectly. I really really liked the last line as it related to the story. I like not knowing where things are going until the end. I do the same thing with my writing, but I get reamed for it. I guess I’m not as good a writer as you! Nice job!
I posted something that I wrote several years ago, and I have no idea if it is any good. Could you take a look at it form me?
http://ceruleantides.wordpress.com/2013/02/16/something-i-wrote-years-ago-when-i-felt-kinda-like-i-feel-now/
I’d really appreciate a very HONEST opinion! Thanks!
February 17th, 2013 at 22:47
Nice. I like the ‘self’ conversation style of the piece. It sucked me into the scene. Nice job.
February 18th, 2013 at 10:52
Good one
Thank you
February 18th, 2013 at 00:00
This picture is wonderful. It shows the contrast between civilization and nature, and how the wall that separates the two is being torn down. I’m not so sure that this is true, which, if that is the case, makes the photo more about hope. Very nice.
February 21st, 2013 at 19:06
That is a very nice thought and a good observation
February 18th, 2013 at 02:12
Since you’re from Dublin, thought you might be interested in this other poet and writer who is also from Dublin. You can find him here (he has two blogs, one for poetry and another for stories):
http://joe2poetry.wordpress.com/
http://joe2stories.wordpress.com/
You can tell him I sent you if you want. I highly recommend him.
February 21st, 2013 at 19:05
Hey, thanks for the offer. I did enjoy reading through his blog!
February 18th, 2013 at 16:24
An intriguing little piece. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for posting.
February 18th, 2013 at 17:54
My pleasure, Anthony. Thank you for taking time off to read and reply